Tuesday, August 9, 2011

Cement Prophets



The crawling sun announces
A morning tender
Rusty scars blend with orange(ish) dawn streaks
But
Cement prophets proclaim torments scream
Black clouds close like stage curtains quickly
Tender moments swept away in Act I
Love notes lost
Memories walk west and disappear



For Wordle 16

4 comments:

sharplittlepencil said...

Henry, the opening, "The crawling sun announces/a morning tender," sets up the action perfectly. Loved you use of the prompt! Amy
Here's mine:
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Kelly said...

Lots of interesting word combinations here. I especially like "crawling sun" and "cement prophets."

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Traci B said...

Wonderful use of contrast in this one, Henry. The use of "tender" twice normally would strike me as unnecessarily repetitive, but it works here. I liked the whole thing, especially that last line - the memories following the sun to the west and dropping below the horizon.

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