Thursday, May 5, 2011

Two for One (Poets Rally 43)

Rose scented candles
wait for
a flicker
            of flame.

In stillness
of silent readiness
they smell
like  roses
slouching in dark.


Cobwebbed chambers,
  indolent heart,
  linger for impulse,
  loitering for life
  that left the building.


Olivia said...

Very well crafted!
Loved the metaphors.. :)

Many Hugs xox

Belinda said...

You speak of emptiness and wasted potential so eloquently.

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Uma Anandane said...

Beautiful vision and well penned poem

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

very cute imagery,
brilliantly done.

Paul said...

I like this, particularly the last stanza, good effective metaphor

WyomingDiva said...

Underneath these images, I get the sense of waiting in vain for...something. Well written!

Unknown said...

spider on flower
if I seem lazy, I'm not
fly here and behold


I dig the sense of suspense here, as if the speaker is asking a question that the reader must answer. Excellent!

Anonymous said...

adoring it,,
would love to read more on your work!

Bing Yap said...

"loitering for life
that left the building"

so sad... one can wait forever but will it ever return? i wonder... such profound thoughts beautifully written! thanks for sharing and for the visit. :)

K McGee said...

Well crafted and I love the picture. How I long to be at the foot of that tree.

Lolamouse said...

I love the image of slouching roses. Thanks for stopping by my blog and Happy Rally!

Helena said...

I liked the feel to this one.

'Roses slouching in the dark'. Cracking line.

barbara said...

I like the slouching roses.
Ya suppose the flames have also left the building?

Anonymous said...

Beautiful poem, exquisite picture.

I'm Just a Man (Recording Experiment ... I can't sing)

I am in the mood to change my tree to a cubic version.